Friday, May 5, 2017
My ANZAC- beyond the line
This week in group 2 we have been watching this video about war 1 and some 2 little boy and some soldiers. We had to write about what it was doing, smell, sound, what you could see, hear and touch.
i hope you like my story.
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Hi, Keyana!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you put your story onto a slide so that the story was not on a document and sitting there looking dull. I think that putting the words like Smash and WHAT!, in bold. I really enjoyed it, but some sentences did not make sense.
I really hope you will use my comment to improve on your next story!
From Mikayla Y.
Thank you Mikayla for this beautiful comment and I will fix it up and make my sentences make more sense. I really hope you could still comment on some of my blog post, I really like how you said I really hope you will use my comment to improve on your next story!
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