For the past week I have been working on a story at is called Buster the Boxer, he is a dog that loves trampoline and in the story I was Buster the Boxer. We had a video to watch about Buster the Boxer and write as if we were him.
I HOPE YOU LIKE MY WRITING!!!!!
Hello I am Buster the Boxer, It was Christmas eve ,It was snowing outside, Inside there were some decorations on the tree it had Christmas string, colorful plastic people and a star on the top of the tree and I think it looked pretty awesome. Emma was jumping on the beautiful big bed …
Suddenly Emma’s mother came in and said it is past your bedtime, so Emma said “ok I will go to bed bye mum love and good night”. Emma’s father was making a beautiful big trampoline for christmas, But he had hurt his finger and I said “oh no” in my head.
I went into the lounge and went to the window. There were other animals on the trampoline jumping and they look like they are having fun, I started to get jealous and then I started to get sad… But one of the animals said something.
The badger said “Hello” all of the animas let's jump around.
“Ok”
“Yay”
“Ahaha”
“ This is the best trampoline “
I went back to Emma’s room and waited, it was christmas morning. I ran outside with Emma. I sprinted as fast as I could to go on the trampoline and I jumped really high. Emma started to look little angry and then she looked like she was happy. Emma face was surprised and her parents were too.
Hi Keyana it your little sis here I thought your story was really interesting to read it was also funny at the same time. Next time can you tell us about the dog felling on the trampoline.
ReplyDeleteHi Michaela, Thanks for the comment it really help me a lot . I will comment on one of your blog post so you can reply back to me like what I did, But keep comment on my blog plz thanks you.
DeleteHi Keyana, I like your writing because you have put some speech marks,
ReplyDeleteMaybe sometimes you should put some juicy words on your writing, Keep up the good work.