The Present

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

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• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story

The Present

The Present

One sunny day  I woke up and went to brush my teeth and have a shower. I was playing my favorite video game. Suddenly my mum walked in the door and she said “I have a present for you.”

I keep playing my video game then I started thinking about it  then I open it. It was a puppy. The puppy was yellow and had a black nose.

Then the puppy barked.  I threw it on the ground because he was annoying me and the puppy got me so  frustrated . I said get lost then the puppy came back and did a sad face and I said “Go away” and I  went to play my video game again.

The puppy saw a red ball and the puppy try to get it. Then he give it back to me I threw it away and it went inside his box and the puppy ran. The puppy was going around and hitting stuff.

Then the puppy give the ball back to me and I was thinking about it. So I told my mum I was going out with my puppy and playing with the red ball outside. I feel dumb then I was thinking about it If I should have the puppy so I play with the puppy all day.

The puppy was like to me because I have one leg and he has one arm. I started to like the puppy because he is cute dump silly and funny I love my puppy now I will never ever be mean to my puppy again. I learnt to never judge someone to how they look.

I feel so disappointed that I was being mean to my puppy that my mum give to me. I should be so grateful to have a puppy the end.