My worst walking day ever
WALT: recall events through the eyes of an animal.
BY Keyana
It was a beautiful sunny day in December in Africa. I was going to the waterhole with my family. It was really early morning. I could see a group of lions lying in the sun getting ready to pounce on the herd. I know that I am going to be attacked and I know that I am weak,so I tried to keep close to my father. The lions came and bit me and my mother came so they can protect me. But mum went away because mum thought that I was ok, but I wasn’t. So I got bitten by the lions and scratched, until his teeth got loose.
When I got caught it was like BAM I could feel the wind blowing on my face like a butterfly.
I can see the lion's eyes flashing. It looked like they had worms coming out, like they were going to chase me. Suddenly I went into the water. The three lions are pulling me then I felt the crocodile trying to pulling me too. The daddy buffalo was trying to pull me but the lion was pulling me too but it feel like they were pulling me apart. The lions won the tug of war and the lions pulled me out onto the bank. The daddy buffalo almost got me so he kept trying to get me and the daddy buffalo did get me.
I feel so happy that I am back with my nice family.
Good job Keyana. I like when you said you were going to the waterhole with your family. Next time you should add more exciting words.
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ReplyDeleteHI Keyana, I really enjoyed reading your writing and thought this is one of the best pieces of writing I've seen from you! I can see that you have proofread your work carefully so that it makes sense. Did you use the read/write tool to help?
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